I know most of Disintegration pretty well - used to listen to it a lot the first time I was in college(and this song was one of a few specifically that I listened to a LOT, and which made it into iTunes later), and it had a pretty profound impact on a lot of my ideas of poeticism, though to be fair, so has a good chunk of TS Eliot's work which is completely unrelated.

(OH BUT WAIT. He also drew love/drowning parallels, in Prufock. Innnnnteresting.)

But no, despite being a constant rewriter of fiddly things like commas and so on as well(I tend towards long sentences, and therefore end up being very picky about their exact flow and gating and shape and that of surrounding sentences), I don't actually see a need for a major rewrite, because it already fits really well; I just wish I could say YES I TOTALLY PLANNED IT THAT WAY. REALLY. Because I didn't, at least not consciously. I suppose the subconscious argument could be made, though. There are an awful lot of parallels and little locking-points where the story and the song sort of click together and anchor. I joke about happy accidents but I don't honestly think coincidences happen quite to that degree heh.