I feel like I'm not doing his completely broken-to-pieces detached-from-humanity post-GN fatalistic mindset any kind of justice.
Had to stick my nose in here - I don't think anyone knows exactly what Rorschach is supposed to be like if he survives Karnak, except maybe Beardo. In any universe where he survives, he's looking at the fact of his own continued existence as basically at odds with his entire worldview, and it's not just acceptable that you should write him as changed and deeply shaken, it's required. And in Brushstrokes, he's not only survived, he's been sent 10 years ahead into a dystopian future, so there's also that.
As for when this changed state of mind should surface, I can't see anywhere where you've been too forward or heavy-handed about it. Rorschach has always been perfectly sane when it comes to impersonal problem-solving (as inhumanly sane as Adrian, even; they just chase different objectives), and if he has stuff to do and problems to solve, then I think the only IC thing for him to do is to keep functioning and get shit done. Which is exactly what you've had him doing all along: trying to survive and figure out his new world, not crying and cursing the heavens or anything like that. So far his newly fractured identity hasn't had a chance to surface, which is IC and as it should be considering the events of the story.
It's going to surface soon, obviously, which is the thing we've all been waiting for and the essential reason to have brought Rorschach into a future-AU in the first place. It needs to be a watershed moment, and it needs to relate back to everything that's made him as inhuman as he's been for the past ?? years. I am pretty sure you have set up a suitably compelling trigger, and you've taken a huge amount of care to invoke Rorschach's past through Dan.
What I mean, after all this babble, is that I think your characterization is solid, and an entirely reasonable extrapolation of what we've seen in the GN, past a major pivotal point.
Also, I'm sorry you've been so troubled by a bad review or a downrating or whatever it was. You're too conscientious to ever just say fuck the haters aren't you? I think you're wonderful for that, but I really encourage you to just let this one go. They are not interested in criticizing the story in order to improve it, so there's no point worrying about their point of view.
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Date: 2009-07-13 06:15 pm (UTC)Had to stick my nose in here - I don't think anyone knows exactly what Rorschach is supposed to be like if he survives Karnak, except maybe Beardo. In any universe where he survives, he's looking at the fact of his own continued existence as basically at odds with his entire worldview, and it's not just acceptable that you should write him as changed and deeply shaken, it's required. And in Brushstrokes, he's not only survived, he's been sent 10 years ahead into a dystopian future, so there's also that.
As for when this changed state of mind should surface, I can't see anywhere where you've been too forward or heavy-handed about it. Rorschach has always been perfectly sane when it comes to impersonal problem-solving (as inhumanly sane as Adrian, even; they just chase different objectives), and if he has stuff to do and problems to solve, then I think the only IC thing for him to do is to keep functioning and get shit done. Which is exactly what you've had him doing all along: trying to survive and figure out his new world, not crying and cursing the heavens or anything like that. So far his newly fractured identity hasn't had a chance to surface, which is IC and as it should be considering the events of the story.
It's going to surface soon, obviously, which is the thing we've all been waiting for and the essential reason to have brought Rorschach into a future-AU in the first place. It needs to be a watershed moment, and it needs to relate back to everything that's made him as inhuman as he's been for the past ?? years. I am pretty sure you have set up a suitably compelling trigger, and you've taken a huge amount of care to invoke Rorschach's past through Dan.
What I mean, after all this babble, is that I think your characterization is solid, and an entirely reasonable extrapolation of what we've seen in the GN, past a major pivotal point.
Also, I'm sorry you've been so troubled by a bad review or a downrating or whatever it was. You're too conscientious to ever just say fuck the haters aren't you? I think you're wonderful for that, but I really encourage you to just let this one go. They are not interested in criticizing the story in order to improve it, so there's no point worrying about their point of view.