oh man, do i love your writing style. this was so intense and beautiful and the part right at the beginning, when Rorschach jumps in after Daniel even without knowing how to swim...guh. that was perfect. i especially liked how completely disorienting it was underwater before he was able to find Daniel. that part was just so well done and i am SO HAPPY you wrote that the way you did instead of just having him magick Dan out of the water.
but really i'm pretty :3 about the whole thing.
oh! this line: He’s been broken to pieces, and he doesn’t need to take off the mask to show it, every twitch and shudder as clear as a brittle fracture line, spidering out from his core, distorting the picture into a thousand tiny reflections and refractions and ghosts.
amazing. this entire fic reads so much like poetry but that line in particular struck out at me.
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Date: 2009-05-03 04:07 am (UTC)but really i'm pretty :3 about the whole thing.
oh! this line: He’s been broken to pieces, and he doesn’t need to take off the mask to show it, every twitch and shudder as clear as a brittle fracture line, spidering out from his core, distorting the picture into a thousand tiny reflections and refractions and ghosts.
amazing. this entire fic reads so much like poetry but that line in particular struck out at me.